The story itself isn’t particularly well developed and some inconsistencies – for example, age of Jimmy in first part, then he and sister are twins in 2nd part.«12345» You committed a MASSIVE continuity error. Sex video 26 comments«12345»Anonymous readerReport 2014-03-01 06:00:35u need to pay more attention to parts one and twoAnonymous readerReport 2014-01-26 00:33:34I agree age is now confusingdivinemarleyReport 2014-01-15 10:19:40wow. 26 comments«12345»Anonymous readerReport 2014-03-01 06:00:35u need to pay more attention to parts one and twoAnonymous readerReport 2014-01-26 00:33:34I agree age is now confusingdivinemarleyReport 2014-01-15 10:19:40wow. In your first chapter you clearly said he was 14 years old, and YEARS YOUNGER then his sister.anonymous readerReport 2013-08-11 12:43:50The sex parts are good. The story itself isn’t particularly well developed and some inconsistencies – for example, age of Jimmy in first part, then he and sister are twins in 2nd part.«12345»
