There was no flow to the story. XXX But 1 thing is you said she was a virgin so no matter she would have felt pain when that guy rammed his dick in her pussy. And I agree with the other comment about being a virgin thing. Detail matters. With not much detail. It was a little short & didn’t have much detail but all around a great story. It felt like you were just listing everything that happened. Def would have hurt you.Anonymous readerReport 2010-06-26 06:07:11Please proof your story. It was a little short & didn’t have much detail but all around a great story. With not much detail. Detail matters. You should definitely make a part two.
Actors:
Julia North / Paul Stalker
